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A moment passed, then another, before a dark shadow launched into the air. The shadowy figure hung for moments, a dark blotch against the blue-black sky, before plummeting down. Somersaulting ...

Ohmygod, I can completely imagine you reading this out loud. It's really... good. :D It's cold outside. Now that was an interesting line. I like how you used it twice, ...

Movie Theater In the very first line, this is capitalized. It isn't a proper noun, unless you put in the name of this particular movie theater. I really like how ...

Hmm... This is a little hard to understand. I really like the style you've written it in. For I would miss the way She’d tell I think it makes the ...

I think you probably should have put this into lyrical, because, although you WROTE it from mulitple points of view, the poem is from one point of view. Yu still ...

Ohmygod. This just was really excellent poetry... I wasn't expecting that. I think it made the plot... less mushy, and more fitting to the type of style you chose to ...

This is a really good poem. I can't exactly see what you are trying to convey here, but the first verse just sounds... really good. I tink maybe because "Make ...

I. Am. Madly. In. Love. With. Frank. The SIX FOOT TALL BUNNY! Okay. I totally watched that movie like 3 times over and over last night, hahaha. But on your ...

It seems like you used a few words that have... well, gone out ogf style, and it seems you might find a few of them in some really old stuff ...

She looked up at me, her eyes wide like Anna Marie when she had seen that one butterfly on a flower out in the soccer field while we were at ...

This was odd. I don't exactly see what you are trying to say... like what Shriek said. "...The pain came from everywhere but my ears..." This cracked me up :D

These are really beautiful lyrics. The name could be chnaged, because it seems... kind of plain, compared to the rest of the lyrics. "Let’s pick at the scabs, From the ...

WOW, I think this is ABSOLUETLY WONDERFUL! I think that you could add the name Dani in a little more, so readers won't be like, "Dani who?" Also, best friend ...

So much energy With nowhere to go I don't know how To let it flow Let it leave Let it out I feel that things Are just about To blow, ...

Then I can re-spin my past Like a spider that's a victim Rebuilding his broken home Old troubles not afflicting And then when I'm ready I'll start life all over ...